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New Folio... Reworked by inspiredMark New Folio... Reworked by inspiredMark
This is a rework of [link]

Thanks to :iconliquisoft: for the critique on the linked piece I went back and reworked it.

Added more contrast and pop as well as some more details. Interested to see the reaction to this design over the previous.

Thanks to :icondepthskins: for direction too.
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:icontheryanford:
This is a great improvement upon your previous work. I've got just a handful more suggestions that I think will help things operate a bit better:

- The introductory text (the "Hello" et al) looks pretty decent, but the word "Hello" isn't hanging properly. It needs to be nudged a wee bit to the left because of the serifs on the H. Those don't count as letterform shapes to the eye, which is why using them as a basis for alignment doesn't work. CSS doesn't really care about serifs, of course, which is why the nudge will only be useful if the only thing that will ever go there are vertically-oriented letters (like H, L, K, R, E, etc etc etc...no W's or A's).

- There is a competition happening between the introductory text and the image next to it. Both are trying to draw my eye. Might I suggest making the word "hello" a much warmer or more vibrant color? It would help maintain dominance against the currently-blue image to the right. Another solution would be to swap positions of the text and image (image on left, text on right), which would solidify the image's dominance.

- Link colors look a little dull when placed on the gray background color. They share a similar gray value, and as a result they don't really stand out as links. Maybe bump them up ever so slightly.

- Page curl on the faux-paper bugs me. A lot of designers do this...they make a page curl that is totally flat. I think it looks lazy. Page curls are organic and should be treated as such. The little triangular corner fold just bugs me, but maybe it's a personal preference.

- Header seems like it's taking up more space than it needs. I think you can reduce the height of the header by 10px-20px and still retain the visual padding you want.

- The white paper page thing looks like it has too many words per line (the "critique mode" thumbnail doesn't let me see). Make sure all body copy stays between 7-12 words per line for maximum legibility and reading comfort.

- The handwriting touches are pretty nice, but I think they could stand out more. Right now their colors feel a bit dull.

That's it. Hope it helps!
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:iconmanjatsonic:
manjatsonic Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
What an amazing design :eyepopping:
can you make this for blogger templates? :)
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:iconthekayleigh:
thekayleigh Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2010
Cool :) I have one suggestion to you about the date stamp maybe you should do it in the same way as navbar and footer is done. Btw. Great work +f
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010
Many thanks for the suggestion :)
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:iconthekayleigh:
thekayleigh Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2010
You are welcome
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:iconsilent-princee:
silent-Princee Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
God Job Man!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009
Thank you :)
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:icondev-boy:
dev-boy Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2009
nice JOb!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
Hey thanks :)
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:iconmagnoid:
magnoid Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009  Hobbyist Interface Designer
nice design, very clean
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
Thank you :)
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:icongta-timeout:
gta-timeout Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Hobbyist Interface Designer
great work!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Cheers :)
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:iconjsddesign:
jsddesign Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009   Interface Designer
very beautiful! congratulations!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thank you :)
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:icongeckokid:
geckokid Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
very very nice! i do however miss the sort of texture you applied to the old design's bars, maybe not noise but proper leathery texture?
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
I hear you. Definitely something I will look to bring back.

Many thanks :)
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:iconrameexgfx:
rameexgfx Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Student Interface Designer
very nice design...
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks :)
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:iconrameexgfx:
rameexgfx Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009  Student Interface Designer
ur welcome.....
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:iconroren001:
roren001 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
Both versions are beautiful clean layouts, especially so on this revamped one. I do like the small changes you've made. Probably the most important ones are the active page colour on your nav and that you've brought the links closer to the logo.

I do love the colour of both pages and yes the critique was right you did need more contrast on the old one, but you could have done the same by changing the colour of the text or links instead. But I don't need to tell you that, because I think you know what your doing, and you do it well too :). So long as you can justify the colour change and it conveys the message or feel you are trying to give your viewer then thats great.

One thing does irk me-the hand written type. Is it your intention to use them as links/nav? I don't have a problem with this, it can be quite effective and damn right cool, in the right design. But if you have this ultra clean layout w/clean type, it's like leopard spots on a zebra print.
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks for the comments I appreciate them.

I'm going to do something with the handwritten text. Not sure what but I certainly know what you are saying.

Many thanks :)
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:iconroren001:
roren001 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
You're welcome.
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:iconforty-winks:
forty-winks Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009
nice, clean, I like it a lot more than the previous version.
I agree with $liquisoft about the links beeing a bit too dull.
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Many thanks :)
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:iconev4n:
ev4n Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009
huge improvement
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks :)
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:icondodokiller:
Dodokiller Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
Great work :) :+fav:
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Many thanks :)
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:iconjkhx:
JkHx Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2009  Student
Wow, amazing job, easy readable, clear and design except (for me) scissors mark.
Revision is much better !
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks very much. Yeah I might rethink the scissor marks.

:)
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:iconslimred:
SlimRed Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2009
Nice and clean man :+fav:
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks dude :)
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:icongimmyfood:
gimmyfood Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2009  Professional General Artist
I must say the revised version is much more appealing :P Love it!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Appreciate it :)
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:iconexoheartbeat:
eXoHeartbeat Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Epic design, I really love the style to it.
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thanks Jakee :)
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:iconexoheartbeat:
eXoHeartbeat Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
You're welcome :)
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:icondyson247:
Dyson247 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Best portfolio ever seen! :+fav:
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Many thanks :)
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:iconmh-design:
MH-Design Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
cool layout man looks great.
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
Thank you :)
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:iconwfwillia:
wfwillia Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009   Interface Designer
very cool, very clean.
i like the changes, definitively an improvement.
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:icondeadlinesdesign:
deadlinesdesign Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
The whole Design looks really clean and easy to use. I love the style you used at the header and the Footer.

But whats the point of this "cut out and keep"-tag? I mean it`s creative but is it usefull and needed in really clean design like yours? I think I would like it much more without this "cut"-thing but its your turn :D

Finally a really great design (:+fav) and I would like to know if you used a font for the headings of "design it", "build it"... or if you handdrawed the headings (if font pls call me the name :))
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:icondot-next:
dot-next Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
awesome work - very clean design!
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Hey thanks man :)
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:iconfewela:
fewela Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
i like the idea .. good work mate :)
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Thank you :)
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:iconbiosss:
BioSss Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Looks really cool man. :) Nice rework. ;)
:+fav:
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:iconinspiredmark:
inspiredMark Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
Appreciate it and thanks for the :+fav: :)
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:iconbiosss:
BioSss Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
No problems mate, nice job. ;)
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